Print Story WFC4 postmortem, Grocery List edition
In which I turn all the vehemence previously taken out on other entries in my comprehensive review to my own piece.


I started reading other reviews before I read most of the stories, and I don't know why several said this batch was better than previous ones. I was out for WFC 2 and 3, but I think this one had a couple stellar entries, a few decent ones and a bunch of crap.

So I wrote it in about two hours of a morning while my spousal unit was out of town. I was lonely, I didn't want to study, and I wanted to try putting some faces to the "he wants sex and she doesn't" sterotype or archetype. Then I realised I would never have enough time to do it in-depth, so I Strunked it, good and hard. This also saved me from filling in embarassingly inaccurate details, since I've never been a man, or had a low-libido wife. Looking at it now, I think it could have used a couple more passes through the Strunkinator.

As with "Songs of the Redeemed," (my WFC1 entry) not much happened in the narrative. I think it's more excusable at this length.

Probably the worst darling I've ever not killed:

  • eggs
  • chicken (which should come first?)

Did everyone get that the characters had a baby? Does anyone think the baby information was superfluous and the story would have been better without it? I used "baby" mostly because it's a convenient cultural shorthand.

Oh, and the title is kind of dumb. I couldn't think of anything that told it slant, so I just used the first list the narrator made. I wanted to post it and get back to test-cramming.

Full discussion: http://www.hulver.com/scoop/story/2006/11/6/135331/162